Friday, July 5, 2013

Children of the Planet Book 1 - Chapter 1: "And Six There Shall Be"

With November fast approaching, it's time for me to start thinking about the next NaNoWriMo (National Novel Writing Month). Last year, I wrote 50,618 words of magic, action, and plot holes in Children of the Planet Book 1 between November 1st and 29th. This year, Lord willing, I'll be penning Book 2, and I thought a good place to start my preparation would be in the editing of my first book. I literally haven't touched it since I finished it in November, and now would be as good a time as ever to get editing over and done with. And so, over the next weeks and months, I'll be editing it, one chapter at a time, and posting the chapter here. I'm considering posting more than one chapter at a time, and will certainly be posting my other usual stuff along with these, so remember to check back frequently.

A few notes. First, while I certainly encourage you to read this, it is a bit long. Secondly, I wrote this as a book for teens or young adults. It would be considered PG-13, and contains a fair level of violence, but is devoid of any language or sensuality. Nonetheless, I would read it before showing it to any younger siblings if I were you. Finally, blogspot kills all my paragraphs when I paste it, so while I tried to put indents back in, it may still be a bit hard to read. In any case, I hope you enjoy, and please leave comments and tips!



Chapter 1: “And Six there shall be”

                With a flick of her wrist, Carinthia wreathed her body in strands of steam and disappeared into the night. Elena quickly raised her sword in a defensive posture, straining her eyes to find her opponent in the murky darkness of London. However, she was unprepared, and Carinthia found her first. The vaporous warrior rushed passed Elena, her blade making a shallow cut in the girl’s arm along the way. First blood had been drawn, and it was up to Elena to even things out. She watched closely as Carinthia leapt back into the darkness, quickly sheathing her weapon as she did so. Her eyes darting back and forth, Elena’s hand slowly reached for her back pocket, and when she saw a wisp of steam, she leapt to the side. As she had expected, Carinthia once again dashed at her, and Elena threw a handful of small orbs in the sword mistress’ path. Quickly drawing her weapon once again, Elena barely blocked Carinthia’s attack as she sped past. Then, the balls burst, sending out a powerful gust of wind and blowing away the steam that pervaded the streets.
   With her target in sight, Elena rushed at Carinthia, ready to finally start their duel. Elena made a quick jab at Carinthia’s shoulder, but Carinthia merely ducked and let the blade sail by her head. In one quick movement, Carinthia slashed at Elena’s abdomen, and then slashed at her head as Elena jumped out of the way. Elena blocked the strike, but was caught on the wrist as she brought her arm back. “Sorry…” Carinthia mumbled, and continued her assault. She stabbed forward, her blade gleaming in the night, her brow dripping with sweat, and her opponent matching her blow for blow. Elena slashed at Carinthia’s chest, but Carinthia brought her sword across her body, the tip of the blade pointing towards the ground. Carinthia followed through with the block and brought her sword around, making a downward slash at Elena. Elena swung upwards, blocking the strike.
   There they were, locked in deadly combat. Shadows swirled around them, just as beams from the nearby lamps shone through the murk. The cobblestone was cold and uncaring beneath them, as solid as it was supposed to be. Drops of blood and sweat had been shed as evidence to the battle taking place. The benches and bushes around them were witnesses to this fierce duel, and looked on in silence as the two quietly pushed forward, each attempting to knock the other back out of the lock. Finally, their blades parted when Carinthia jumped back, sheathed her sword, and shot a forceful blast of water forward in one quick, sudden, and violent movement, rolling onto her back afterwards. Elena was knocked back onto her bottom, and just sat there in surprise.
   “Come on Carinthia” Elena said in an exasperated tone after catching her breath, “Using alchemy isn’t fair. You know I can’t use Em like you!”
   With a grin, Carinthia replied, “Oh, for goodness sake Elena, we were at a stalemate.” Suddenly worried as Elena rubbed her eyes, she asked, “Are you alright? I didn’t hurt you or anything, did I?”
   “No, no, I’m fine. Really.” Elena said with a smile, I just had dirt in my eye.
   “You’re sure? I could’ve sworn I hit you earlier.”
   “Ok, yes, you got me.” Elena admitted, “But it was just a cut. If anything that blast of water hurt the most; thanks to you, my butt’s going to be sore for a week!”
   “Why you…you’d better start running before I make it hurt for a month!”
   Giggling, the two girls ran out of the palace courtyard and into the night. With screams of delight, they splashed one another with water from the nearby fountain. Now soaked, they decided it was time to end their midnight fun, and snuck back into the castle. What awaited them would turn the night sour.


   Isaac slowly rubbed his eyes as sunlight invaded his room. With a yawn, he laxly raised his feet over the side of his bed and stood up. After a long and luxurious stretch, he made his way to the kitchen. Pouring himself a glass of milk, he situated himself on the counter and proceeded to drink it. “Isaac?” a female voice called. “Get ready for school. Your father already left for work.”
“Yes mom…” Isaac replied in an impatient tone.
   With a sigh, he chugged the rest of his milk, placed the empty glass in the sink, and returned to his room. He grabbed his backpack and made his way to the bedroom door. His room was littered with an assortment of clothes, video game cases, empty bags of snack food, and a variety of other junk. After a quick glance to make sure he hadn’t forgotten anything, he jumped downstairs, opened the front door, and ran out into the chilly air of the Massachusetts. He suddenly stopped, turned around and ran back into the house. After grabbing his grey hoodie, he pulled it on and once more stepped outside.
   After a short running start, he leapt into the air, and sailed towards the bus stop. Using wind currents to carry and guide him, it was only a few seconds before he reached the stop at the end of the street. The bus was just coming up to the stop, and kids around him were piling into the bright yellow vehicle. After obtaining a place in the crowd of bodies, he finally stepped up into the bus and sat in the first seat he could find. He closed his eyes, hoping to get a bit more sleep, but his rest was interrupted when another boy plopped down beside him.
   “Hey, you’re Isaac right? The guy that can use Ice Alchemy?”
   With a sigh, Isaac replied, “Yeah, I’m him. Why?”
   Suddenly very excited, the boy let off a barrage of questions, “Hey, how do you do it? Like, is there a secret? Can you make snowmen? Can you help me with water Alchemy? Hey, how about my friend, he’s a wind alchemist, maybe you can show us how to do it? Hey, maybe…”
Isaac cut him off by raising his hand. “Hey, hey, slow down. Look kid, I’m just another person, okay? Go find someone else to bother. Or at least shut up”
   However, while the boy closed his mouth, he resolutely remained in his seat. Isaac closed his eyes once more, and finally reached the point of sleep, but his rest was broken when the bus slowed to a halt. “Please don’t tell me we’re at school already…” he muttered. “Ugh, we’re at school” a girl said as she walked passed him, making a lackluster effort to exit the bus. With another plaintive sigh, Isaac got up and made his way to the bus doors. Several minutes later, he sat down at his desk.
   “Welcome class. Today is review day. We’ll be going over some basic alchemy and geography in preparation for the test.”
Settling into his chair, Isaac put his head on his hand, and promptly fell asleep.



   Annie was knocked to the ground as a huge fist pummeled her in the face. Tenderly rubbing her jaw as a new bruise appeared, she grimaced and stood back up.
   “So what’s it going to be? You going to pay up yet babe?” The thug in front of her said with a sneer.
   “Heh, like that’s ever going to happen!” She replied with a chuckle.
   Annie leapt into the air, her fist flying into his open mouth right as he started to retort. She drew her hand back, and a few of his teeth dropped to the ground as he staggered back in pain and surprise. With a cry of rage, he flew at her, his arms swinging wildly. Realizing she was now in control of the situation, Annie deftly dodged each blow he threw, returning with one of her own after every swing. He threw a high hook punch, but Annie caught it with her wrist, guiding the arm over her head as she swung around with a spinning hook kick. Annie frowned when she realized her attack missed, and leapt back, arms raised. The thug grinned, pulling his arm back for a punch. With a snicker, Annie quickly stretched her hand out, and a wall of stone emerged from the alley bricks. Before he could stop, the thug’s fist slammed directly into the wall, and he staggered back, clutching his bloodied hand. Annie leapt onto the wall, crouching in a catlike position, and nonchalantly flicked her finger out, slamming a pillar of stone into the man’s temple as he stumbled. He flew across the street into the wall behind him and sagged to the ground, either unwilling or unable to fight. His two companions slowly backed up, and their retreat turned into a mad dash for safety when Annie conjured up a fireball in her hand. She gathered some dirt into it, and threw the small ball of lava at their feet; they ran even faster for the safety of anywhere that was away from her. Grinning, she walked back to her fallen opponent, grabbed his hair, and said, “Now look, Tom, I don’t have a problem with you, so long as you leave me alone. Now, I’m going to take this cash, and you’re going to take your sorry butt back to your boss and tell him not to bother me anymore. Got it memorized?”
“Yeah…got it…” Tom mumbled.
   With a grin, Annie let go of his head and walked back in the general direction of her house. Her black skinny jeans were tight against her legs, but her slim appearance was balanced out by the thick leather combat boots she wore, and the belt strapped around her waist that sported a metal baton. She had on an orange A-shirt that with an artistic volcano emblazoned on it. Her once brown hair was now dyed a bright red, and fell back in a ponytail. Using the earth underneath her to catapult herself across the town, she finally reached her own house. She burst past the door, took some money out of the leather pack that hung on her back, and tossed it on the counter. “Mom! I’m home! There’s some cash on the counter for groceries!” Annie shouted.
   “I’m right here Annie” a voice behind her said quietly.
   Annie turned around and saw her mother sitting at the kitchen table. With a look of annoyance displayed on her face, Annie walked over and took the only other seat that was there. Her mother was not smiling either, and with a frown began speaking. “Annie, what have I told you?”
   “I know. But mom, really, what else can we do? I’m strong. In fact, I’m the strongest.”
   “Yes, but there are other ways of getting money than stealing it.”
   “How do you know I stole it?”
   Annie’s mother simply looked at her, and with sigh, Annie replied, “Okay, you got me. I stole it. But it was from a thug who picked a fight with me, ok?”
   “You got in another fight? Oh Annie, what am I going to do with you? Ever since your father…”
   “Don’t even. Don’t go there mom, ok? It’s just you and me now. He’s dead and gone.”
   “Yes, you’re right. It’s just that it’s dangerous this far out. Even with the Lava nation’s soldiers, Australia is hazardous for everything that lives here. We need someone to look out for us.”
   “So what are you going to do, find a new boyfriend?”
   “Annie!”
   “Well, you said it yourself! You want a guardian, and obviously I’m not good enough to look out for us!”
   “Annie, you know that’s not what I meant!”
   “You know what mom, I’m done. I can’t live like this anymore.”
   “Annie, what are you saying…”
   “Go find yourself a new husband, I’m leaving.” Annie shouted, stomping towards the door.
   “Annie, wait!” Her mother called, but girl was already gone.


   Mei deftly operated the controller, moving the control stick and pressing buttons without a second thought; it was instinct. Her hands controlled the deft movements of Tordelmos as he leapt about the screen, slashing apart goblins. She had played this level thousands of times, and knew it so well that she could easily perform algebraic equations in her head while she played. However, she was so caught up in her activities that she didn’t hear her mother calling for her. When her mother finally stopped calling and burst into her room, Mei stopped where she was, looked up, and said, “Is there something I can help you with mom?”
   With a huff and a grin, her mother replied, “Yes, actually. Your father has something for you to try out.”
   Mei’s father was an inventor, so it wasn’t unusual that he had something new for her to play with. Her mother tossed a metallic sphere to her, and as Mei caught it, it opened up and wrapped around her hand. Mei was unperturbed, and watched with curiosity as it settled down. The sphere had become a metal glove that covered her hand and a portion of her arm. As she turned her arm around, she looked up to her mom and said, “It’s cool, but what does it do?”
   “Well, your father says that it’s part of a power suit he’s working on. He’s making it for you actually. Asia’s finest will have to wait.”
   “Awesome! Well, do you want to go downstairs and find out what it does?”
   “Alright, I’ll follow you!”
   Mei stood up, put on her purple jacket, pulled back her shoulder length black hair, straightened her glasses, and stepped out of the room with her mom.
   Mother and daughter flew through the mansion that they called home, using air currents to keep them afloat, and eventually reached the elevator that led to their basement, which doubled as the family’s lab and training facility. Mei walked toward an empty section of the basement, passing huge computer consoles, training droids, and turrets as she went. As she was walking, she saw a small blue button on the glove, and pressed it. Without warning, the glove expanded even further, reaching all the way up her arm, and created an armored spaulder that covered her right shoulder. Caught up with fascination, Mei didn’t expect or dodge the blast of air that hit her in the back.
   “Come one Mei, pay attention!” Her mother jeered.
   Still unaware of what the glove did, Mei decided to throw a blast of wind back in retort. She thrust her arm forward, and as the air surged forward, she noticed energy surging forth from the glove. As the blast of air shot ahead, she saw that it was unusually laced with blue energy. Small explosions burst out as the air hit her mom, and the small woman took a step back in surprise.
   “Well, that was cool!” Mei said with smile.
   “Agreed.” Her mother replied. “But I don’t think I want to get hit by it again if it’s all the same to you.
   “Ok, no problem. I’ll just work on some of the droids then.”
As her mother headed back towards the elevator, Mei flew over to a computer console, entered a few commands, and watched as three training droids rose up from the arena to her left. The droids stood resolute, ready to receive any command Mei gave them, but they would only serve as targets for now. Mei decided to see what else she could do with wind alchemy. She flattened her hand, as if preparing to do a karate chop, and sliced it horizontally through the air, aiming for the head of the leftmost droid. A current of air flew from her arm, again laced with blue energy. As it hit the neck of the droid, blasts of energy sent the head flying once it was severed by the wind. Impressed, Mei decided to try fire next.
   She called the elements around her into her hand, and a blue fireball formed. Mei raised an eyebrow, as all the fire she had used before was usually red or orange. Though she could adjust the heat of her flames to create different colors of fire, she had not done so recently, so Mei assumed that it was due to the armor on her right arm. She tossed the fireball at the droid on the right, and it exploded in a burst of blue flame. The droid was thrown back by the blast, and smoldered in the far corner of the room, its metal frame melted by the flames.
   Finally, Mei decided to use her favorite alchemy, lightning. Since Mei was the only person in the world who was able to use lightning alchemy on her own, it was an ability that she savored every moment of. Sparks curled around her gloved hand, energy pulsated around it, and the violet sparks become deep blue streaks of lightning. She shot her fingers forward, and the blue lightning coursed across her arm and into the torso of the last droid. As the last of the lightning entered its body, it shook violently, and then flew across the room as an explosion of blue energy blew it apart. Impressed with the capabilities of her incomplete armor, she decided to head over to the lab to see how her father was doing.


   Jethro closed his eyes and smiled as he skillfully operated the DJ panel in front of him. His black dreads hung loosely, and his hazelnut skin was soaked with sweat as the crowd around him partied. He controlled the crowd with his music, deftly arranging loops in whichever way he saw fit. He saw one woman blow a kiss to him, screaming his name. He had a responsibility as her musician, but Jethro was an athlete at heart, and part of him wanted to be down there, on the dance floor with her. In the end, the temptation won out. He set up a loop and jumped down to the dance floor. Anyone could shake their head back and forth, but it took a true dance master to do what he did: Capoeira.
As his limbs twirled around in the air, the crowd looked on in wonder at the mysterious dance. Twirling around on the palms of his hands, his legs were a flurry of movement. The floor was made of tall rectangular bricks set deep into the ground, and he would pull these up with earth alchemy, sometimes standing on them, sometimes jumping between them, and sometimes launching himself into the air using their upward force. He ended his performance by running up one of the bricks, somersaulting backward into the air, and landing on the palm of his hand, before pushing himself once more into the air, spinning into flip, and landing on his feet. The crowd roared in approval, and he raised his hands to them. Shouts of ‘encore’ resounded throughout the club, but he was done for the night. So he grabbed his earphones and exited the building in a blaze of sweaty glory.
   Jethro walked back towards his home, still sweating in the muggy South American air. He saw the back of the woman who had called his name; she had left a few moments before he did. Cars and motorcycles rushed passed him, full of people who were going to clubs like the one he had just left, ready to drink and party to their heart’s content. “It’s a sad world we live in” Jethro thought to himself as he continued down the path. Suddenly, he stopped in his tracks when he heard a piercing scream come from the building to his right. He spun on his heels and burst through the door.
   “Hello, are you alright?” He shouted up the stairwell. There was no answer. He ran up the stairs and found himself in a long hallway. Another scream echoed, but he couldn’t tell where it came from. He began barging into door after door. One was empty, one contained an older man watching football, but none of them contained a woman in distress. There was only one door left, towards the end of the hall. It was locked, so he began pounding on it. “Hello? Where are you? Do you need help?” Jethro called out. His reply was a scream and the sound of a gun being cocked. With this warning, Jethro used alchemy to call up several sheets of wood from the paneling to act as temporary shields, and bashed the door open. As the splinters flew, a gun fired and a bullet whizzed into one of the shields he was controlling. As it shattered, Jethro saw a woman on the ground, as well as the wielder of the gun. The man dropped the gun and shot a chunk of stone at Jethro. The shields in front of him stopped the rock, but Jethro didn’t drop his guard. While keeping the wood in front of him, he called up an earthen fist from the walls and floor around him to grab the thug, holding the man’s arms to his side and lifting him into the air. The earthen fist pulled back and held him against the wall while Jethro ran to check on the woman. It was the same woman who was at the club, and she looked up at him in thanks. Jethro turned back to the man and said, “You have one chance to get the heck out of here. Run.”
   The thug was dropped to the ground, and ran for his life. Turning back to the woman from the club, he asked, “Are you ok?”
   “Yeah.” She replied. “I think he broke a rib, but aside from that, I’m alright. Thanks.”
   “By the way, I don’t think I caught your name back at the club.” Jethro said with a smirk.
   “Mara, my name’s Mara.” She replied.
   “Alright Mara, let’s get you out of here.”
   Jethro walked Mara out of the house, down the street, and to the hospital, where he checked her in. A few hours, and a quick stop at a bar later, he arrived at his home, which was graciously shared with him by his Aunt and Uncle.
   “Aunt Jane? Uncle Mike? You guys home?” He called out. But there was no answer, so he assumed they were out. He flicked the light switch on, grabbed a bowl of chips, and turned the TV on. The news channel was on, so he decided to watch.
   “This is a special report, a mass murder is on the loose.”
   “Heh, I bet it’s that guy I fought tonight.” Jethro thought to himself, half joking. But as he watched, his mirth turned to horror as the description of the murderer matched the description of the man he had fought perfectly. He almost fainted at the next report.
   “David Forun has killed eight people in the last month, his most recent victims being Jane and Michael Phelp.”


   Ajani had lived a very lonely life the past fifteen years, and as the harsh African sun shown down on his dark head, he contemplated his life. His mother and father had died when he was just a child, and he had been cared for by the rest of his tribe. More specifically, he had been raised by the mother and father of his best friend, Kimbwe, and though they taught him many things, he had learned one very important thing in particular while he was raised by them. Never, under any circumstances, give commands to the Wind above you or the Sand around you. His tribe believed that when a child was born who could move the sand, it would bring destruction to the world. So if anyone knew he could do such things, he would be disowned and cast out of the tribe, perhaps even killed. But he had practiced in secret. Even though he was restricted to earth alchemy while with the tribe, he would sneak out at night to practice with the wind and the sand. It was on these nights that he felt alive; he felt free. The life he led now was not a life, it was a prison. His foster father had told Kimbwe and himself horror stories about the people outside of the tribe. Strange beings that could control water and fire, and could even bring down death from the sky in the form of deadly thunder and lightning. Ajani was curious about the outside world, and one day, he would find it. But he would not let it control him, not like he was controlled now.
   As he was caught up in his thoughts, he felt a wad of mud hit him in the back. Spinning around, he saw Kimbwe holding several more mud balls in front of him. Ajani threw up a cloud of dust and bolted off. As they were throwing mud at each other, they both screeched to a halt when they heard a scream. Vaulting themselves into the air, the two boys saw a group of heavily armed men coming into the camp.
   “Those are Jinto’s men!” Kimbwe said in alarm.
Jinto was a bloodthirsty pirate who roamed the desert, forcing villages to give him food and valuables. He had been here before, when Ajani was much younger. That was how his parents had died, defending the village from Jinto.
   “Kimbwe, we have to fight them. That man killed my parents.” Ajani told his friend.
Kimbwe stood still for a moment, then shook his head. “What can we do? The only way we could fight them all off is if…”
Ajani’s dark brown eyes took on a steely  glint.
   “No…no Ajani…you know that if you use…”
   “There’s nothing else we can do.”
   “But you’ll be killed! If not by Jinto than by the tribe!”
   “Kimbwe, this may be the only chance I have to avenge my parent’s deaths. I need to take it.” Ajani said, a hard note in his voice.
   With a sigh of resignation, Kimbwe nodded. “Then let’s go. We don’t have any time to waste, brother.”
   Ajani and Kimbwe ran back to their hut and went inside. Ajani grabbed his polished stone staff, and Kimbwe grabbed his sword and sling. They snuck around the hut and peered around the corner.
   “I said to give me your food and your women. Is there something wrong? Or perhaps you just didn’t hear me.” Jinto told the leader of the tribe with a sick smile on his face.
   “Take whatever you need, you will find no resistance here.” The elder said.
   “Ready?” Kimbwe asked.
   “Ready.”
   With a shout, the two boys sped at Jinto’s group of bandits. Kimbwe slashed one across the back before he had even turned around, while catching another around the legs with his sling. Ajani meanwhile had quickly disabled a bandit with three quick and precise blows from his staff. He twirled it around and caught another across the jaw, breaking his neck. Both Ajani and Kimbwe then turned and leapt at Jinto, but were blown back by a powerful blast of wind.
   “Most impressive. I didn’t think you were capable of such trickery old man.” Jinto said with a laugh.
The elder, as surprised as anyone else, harshly said, “Ajani, Kimbwe, what are you doing!? You are endangering…”
   “I am avenging my parents’ lives!” Ajani shouted. “The lives that you stole from me!” He said, turning to Jinto.
   “Oh, yes. Those two. I can see their features in you. I had quite a bit of fun with them.” Jinto said with an evil grin.
   Ajani threw his staff to the ground, pulled his arms back, and threw them forward. As his arms pushed forward, a wave of sand surged forward. Several bandits were buried instantly. The bandits were stunned, but quickly split into pairs of wind and earth alchemists and parted the sand as it came down on them. While they were occupied, Ajani used wind to pick his staff up and used the currents to guide it along the ground. It furiously spun, and Ajani moved it through the legs of the bandits, breaking all their shins and knees in a matter of seconds. He pulled his staff back as the sand buried all the bandits except Jinto, who had run out of the way. He turned to run as Ajani walked towards him, but was stopped by blasts of wind pushing into him from all sides, trapping him.
   “Please, I have a family too, don’t kill me!” Jinto pleaded.
   “Really? Well, then I’m sure you’ll be glad to hear that they’ll feel just like I did for the past decade.” Ajani said, his voice and eyes cold despite the blazing sun above him. With a wave of his hand Ajani called forth a pillar of sand in front of Jinto.
   “W-what are you doing?” Jinto asked, terrified.
   Without saying a word, Ajani raised his hand. Jinto was confused at first, but then he felt a small sting on his left cheek. Then he felt two more on his right arm. He realized it was grains of sand when one flew into his eye and he screamed. The sand slowly flew at his body, gaining momentum and volume with each passing second. Soon, the grains stopped hitting him and started going through him, puncturing blood vessels. Then his lungs were pierced, and he started choking in his own fluids. He screamed in pain as he was slowly ripped to shreds by the sand, but a few moments later, his screams stopped. There was nothing left to scream, only a bloody skeleton, its jaw hanging open. Ajani let the rigid pile of bones fall to the ground. He turned around to see the looks of shock and horror on the faces of his tribe. Even Kimbwe had a look of surprise on his face. Then someone cocked an arrow and fired at him. Ajani caught the arrow and threw it to the ground, but he knew his time here was done.
   “Kimbwe, will you come with me?”
   Kimbwe stood there slack jawed. Then he slowly shook his head. Without another word, Kimbwe threw a cloud of sand into the air, and ran off into the harsh heat of Africa’s vast desert.

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